Murphy's Grasp

Robert Quick

Where the -@!# did my muse go?

Writer, dreamer, knight, shackled by entertainment . . . and people.


Two more minutes and she would be free. It had been fifty-eight minutes since Rosa had trapped herself in the hourglass. Like much of her magic, it had been an accident. Spells were tricky like that. Intent and annoyingly detailed description had to match seamlessly or they would invariably go awry. Murphy's Law. According to her teachers, Murphy was a demon that corrupted every spell he could. That was why spells had to be perfect. Any opening and you might get side effects of fear instead of fire, or coughing instead of coffee. She wasn't sure it was possible but one day, she would like to make a bargain with Murphy to stop him from warping her work.

Sand fell in a constant stream from above. Except at her size, the sand turned to melon-sized boulders. Too much had accumulated and the heap in the middle collapsed toward her, threatening to crush her. She scrambled up the side, using the glass wall to help stay upright.

One minute passed and then one more. Nothing happened. Something was very wrong.


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Lampyris Noctiluca

Lampyris Noctiluca

Very nice! I wonder what she was trying to achieve when she cast the spell that trapped her. I like the fact that, on the bright side, she is able to track the passing of time very accurately, being inside an hourglass. Or at least, that's what she might believe...

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nuclearsubmarine

nuclearsubmarine

I like this a lot. I love how magic accidents can be similar to mispronounciations.

I wonder how she'll get out of there now! And what if someone turns the hourglass?

I'm a bit confused by this part: "melon-sized boulders that Too much had accumulated" - did you intend to write something like "the sand turned to melon-sized boulders, of which too much had accumulated, ..." ?

  • #3846 Posted 4 months ago
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Robert Quick

Robert Quick

Thanks. I'm not sure what I had originally intended. That part went through several iterations but I've fixed it enough for now. Glad you liked it.

  • #3848 Posted 4 months ago
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Story prompt:

A few years ago I wrote a short story about a man trapped inside an hourglass. Sadly, I can't find it anymore. But perhaps you could write a new one!

Write a story about someone (not necessarily a man or a human being) trapped inside an hourglass.

The man in the hourglass by Lampyris Noctiluca


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