She was a Black Hole


I grew up on Ficlets. There, the writer inside me had a home. I'm a teacher now, and a 4th grader who reminds me so much of myself asked, "Why don't you share your writing with us?" So, I come tentatively, searching for a place to stretch my writing muscles again.

I kept her at the periphery of my life, all too aware of the danger. She was a black hole, and if I dared to venture near enough, I'd be pulled in, pulled apart. Infinite gravity, infinitesimal space. No chance of escape.

I don't know where I went wrong. I was careful, paranoid even. I played the part, surrounded myself with banal conversations with the dudes at the office. I never went out alone. I wasn't alone tonight. Office Dude John was just in the bathroom, his second beer having made the visit urgent. I kept watch of our glasses at the bar.

A spider crept across my shoulder.

"Jesus!" I moved to swipe it away and met a pale hand that snatched mine and pulled me around

"Hardly," she smirked. The icy golden glamour in her eyes spun me like a fly in spider silk. Her lithe fingers turned the promise ring I always wore. "You're attached? Pity."

Hypnotized, I shook my head. Her smile spread.

No number of oblivious jock-boy co-workers could save me now.

However, that ring--and its bearer--might.


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Comments (3 so far!)

ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

SWEET! I love the allure of her golden eyes. Glamour is often used to connotate vampirism, or their ability to charm victims. Was this your intention?

  • #2686 Posted 5 years ago
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Yes, I meant glamour with the connotations of magical deceit.

  • #2697 Posted 5 years ago
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ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

I added 3 more sections. But I have no idea what you envision for the villain. I also gave the two ring bearers names. But I did not name the villainess you created.

  • #2700 Posted 5 years ago
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Inspired by (prequel to):

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