ElshaHawk LoA

Ficlets and Ficly survivor, FicMom, and Mistress of Well-Intentioned Indecision and Goddess of Unrequited Love. @ElshaHawk @HawkandYoung








"Where are you right now?"

"In my car. I'm driving home from work."

"Are you alone?"

"I'm talking to you. You're in my car, so I'm not alone. Where have you been? I haven't heard from you in days."

"Hmpf. Well, maybe that's because I'm mad at you."

"At me!? Why?"

"You stood me up."

"No, I didn't."

"I waited for hours by the phone. I rearranged my schedule for you."


"I told you to call me on Tuesday. I waited. Then I waited Wednesday. Then I waited Thursday. You never texted, not one excuse."

"You didn't text me, either!"

"AFTER you ditched me! I'm supposed to tell you every day to call me or you forget? I guess if you don't want to be my friend, this is the easiest way to let me down."

"I still want to be your friend."

"I've been forgiving you over and over, letting you back in my heart. I cried myself to sleep over this. Is it me or you that is broken?"

"You're breaking my heart."

"You broke mine on Tuesday."

"I have to get gas. I'll call you right back."



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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

This is a strangely insecure relationship -- and I know of far too many examples of relationships just like it.

  • #2512 Posted 6 years ago
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ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

I think it's an example of making a mountain out of a molehill. All I know is, it feels far worse than it is.

  • #2514 Posted 6 years ago
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I want to offer feedback, but a lot of your recent writing hits too close to home. I've had friends in the past who had this cycle of elevating friendship beyond my ability to fulfill, so I was always "letting them down." It's so frustrating.

  • #2516 Posted 6 years ago
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