Opportunity Knocks


South African.

Leafy goodness!

Raised voices from inside greeted his booted arrival announcement, but it took him a few seconds to realize that somehow no-one seemed to have heard him.

Grims paused, halfway up the porch steps, one foot raised - a pointer-dog parody.

Grims listened.

“We never should have sent him, Cletus! He’s too young, he’s just my baby! He shoulda been back hours ago, I know something’s happened, I just knows it!”

The woman’s voice hitched, as if choking back tears.

“Quite now Maw, you’ll upset the other kids. All we can do now is wait. You’re gonna learn, Maw – feudin’ is war, and there ain’t no such thing as too young when it comes to war.”

“Buh-buh but what if those god-blasted Sonderson’s got ‘im, Paw?”

“Well then they’re also gonna learn that feudin’ is war. They’ll learn it real good.”

Opportunity, thought Grims.


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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

That... is not the direction I expected this arc to take. It's not bad, just not where my brain visualized things going. This changes the scenario in new and intriguing ways.

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ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

I kind of like the 'war is war' talk and the mother's worry. It's kind of odd that they aren't thinking about the monsters out there which seem to be a more imminent threat. Their view of the world might be twisted, but it's theirs.

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Hope I haven't derailed things too much, Jim... :)

I guess it's likely that monsters become less monstrous and more background when you've grown up with them and they've just always been around (if that's even the case here)?

Who knows? :)

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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

In some ways, I enjoy a good derailing. It forces an extra level of creativity to find ways to work with the unexpected. :)

And at this point, we're inside the Korpsky compound, so whatever creatures roam the landscape at night are presumably being kept at bay by the rickety fences.

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