Uncomfortable Silence

Jim Stitzel

I dabble a little in a lot of things — writing, webcomics, gaming, photography, web design, music, and more. I write code full-time and words in the gaps in between.

Jimmy set his lunch down on the break table and plopped down in a chair, heaving a huge sigh.

"Man, what a day," he said, picking up his sandwich and taking a bite.

"Uh..." Frank said, looking at Jimmy then glancing quickly away to catch Seth's eye, sharing a disturbed expression.

"Whampf?" Jimmy asked around a mouthful of bread and bologna.

"Nothing," Seth said.

Jimmy swallowed and looked between his two friends, studying their expressions. "What?" he repeated.

"It's nothing," Frank said, sounding uncomfortable. "Just, uh, have you looked in a mirror today?"

Jimmy tore another bite from his sandwich and chewed silently for a moment while nodding. "Of course. I had to comb my hair and shave this morning, like usual."

"Ok," Seth said. "We were just wondering."

Jimmy set his sandwich down and looked again at his friends. "Seriously, guys, what's got your dander up?"

The other two were silent for a moment. Finally, it was Seth that spoke.

"Well, you might want to look again when you get a chance."


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Comments (3 so far!)



A real friend would hurt your feelings to tell you the truth over something like this. Unless it's so horrible that they're too shocked. This is making squirm. Effective, once again, Jim.

  • #2389 Posted 6 years ago
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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

Hehe, this is a case the falls more into the latter case, at least in my own mind. It's more fun here to let your own imagination fill in the gaps, though. ;-)

  • #2393 Posted 6 years ago
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ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

Nice challenge entry! I, too, am thinking it's more than grease on his nose or something.

  • #2397 Posted 6 years ago
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Personally, I think this is a hard one (twss) but that's what challenges are for, right? Have a conversation between two or more people (people being intelligent entities, not necessarily human beings) where the omission of key information gets things m…

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