Crabby

ElshaHawk LoA

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Maybe it's the blissful fulfillment I see in others' smiles,

or the way they've reached their goals ahead of me,

but I feel crabby tonight.

.

Perhaps it's the way that children won't listen to me,

or the way it seems everyone around me is spouting negative words,

but I feel crabby tonight.

.

It could be the place under my fingernail where something pushed too deep,

or the way that my lunch hasn't settled in my tummy,

but I feel crabby tonight.

.

Might be the way the house looks with chores undone,

or the extra time I spent at work playing catch up,

but I feel crabby tonight.

.

Maybe it's the stack of unread books about to topple under its own weight,

or the numerous tabs on my browser open to unfinished tasks and the overly full email inbox,

but I feel crabby tonight.

.

Maybe it's the unopened quart of chocolate ice cream,

or the denied guilty pleasures of other kinds,

but I feel crabby tonight.

.

Sometimes you cannot know the why of your feelings.

Being denied the why makes me crabby, too.


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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

That last stanza being a couplet instead of a triplet makes me feel crabby tonight. ;-P

  • Posted 3 months ago
ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

I ran out of characters..... I could have mentioned the weather, or maybe something about sleep.. those make me crabby, too.

  • Posted 3 months ago
Robert Quick

Robert Quick

It's not much of a consolation but at least the narrator knows they are crabby. Some less aware folks would just lash out, motivated by something they knew not. And while I know the character limits comes upon us all, I didn't mind the couplet at the end. It was kind of an interesting end. It's like a plucked single string when you were expecting two (or more) and thus focused me more. Added a peculiar kind of tension too.

  • Posted 3 months ago
Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

I will say this, just for the sake of clarity, the couplet didn't actually bother me. It just amused me to add on to the 'crabby' theme Elsha had going on. :)

  • Posted 3 months ago
ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

oh, whew!

  • Posted 3 months ago
slapdashmonuments

slapdashmonuments

I felt it a bit like the last couplet of a Shakespearean sonnet and was like "ah, this is the end now." :DDDD

  • Posted 3 months ago
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Jae

Jae

Writing out frustrations has always been therapeutic in some way. Better on the page than unleashed upon the world at large. That being said, I have journals upon journals that others would swear were written in poison instead of ink, if they were allowed to read them.

  • Posted 3 months ago

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