Into A Dead Zone

TheCheshireChris

I'm just this guy, you know?

To expand on that, I am also the following...

- A former ficly member who is 38 years old and is schizoaffective (depressive type)

- Into creating languages and fantasy worlds from scratch

- A listener of audiobooks & good tunes

- Always too hard on myself


I took a long drag off my cigarette as we passed a sign saying "insert city" population "insert number."

At this point they all blended together.

I flicked the butt out the window at nothing in particular.

"Nothing in particular" could have been this town's motto. There was nothing distinct about it. It was as barren as "middle of nowhere" towns get.

I pulled my hearse into the abandoned looking gas station, which turned out wasn't as abandoned as it initially seemed. A burly man with a beard that could only be described as "epic" came out to attend to the car. He offered a fill up and a window washing and i told him that'd be fine. He quickly disappeared and came back with a bucket of murky water that looked like it'd dirty the window further but he offered it "free of charge" so who was I to argue?

I was just a salesman, after all. My partner was still asleep in the passenger seat while all this hub-bub took place.

This was going to be a dead zone. I could feel it in my bones.


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ElshaHawk LoA

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I assume the dead zone is a good thing for the hearse driver and his partner...

The only thing that bothers me is the repetition of "abandoned".. I'd say "I pulled my hearse into a lifeless gas station which turned out wasn't as abandoned as it initially seemed." Ha, I like the word 'lifeless' here as it goes with the 'dead zone'. Why am I headed towards a zombie sort of story feel here???

Anyway, good job describing the burly man with his epic beard and the murky water for free.

Now I'm wondering if there is something to the sleeping partner.. like a night job, a nocturnal sort of person??

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