Love hurts

Mighty-Joe Young LOA

I went a little Kong, and they put me in the zoo. But now I'm back cause there was more for me to do.


He saw that fake look of self assurance on her face, and it reminded him of a mosquito. People, like mosquitoes, rise out of the warm fluids, and their lives are just what they did in between feeding and reproducing. Here she was, with the life span of an anopheles, thinking she could judge a god.

She had measured him and found him wanting. Though he viewed her judgement to be askew, he knew it wasn't unwarranted. To know her, he had to really get inside her. He had to hear her thoughts and taste the very blood in her veins. But the problem was that he had taken from her without giving anything of himself. The majik didn't work that way. It only left the giver slowly dying inside and the receiver moving on to the next victim.

He sat next to her at the bar and didn't even notice her slender, fine china fingers tremble when she said, "Ernie...I missed you."

The vampire rubbed the half healed hole in his chest where weeks earlier her stake had almost pierced his heart, and said, "Yes you did."


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Storykeeper

Storykeeper

Wow. Your first paragraph packs a punch! The part about rising our of the warm fluids effectively sets a dripping, almost haughtily vicious tone for the rest of the story.

I'm left a little puzzled by the second sentence in the second paragraph. The rest of that paragraph is a nova for more story, though, intimating a backstory of significant depth between these two.

  • #1725 Posted 4 years ago
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ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

Adding the vampire element is clever; it brings out the juxtaposition of their feelings sharply. Now I'm not sure if I want her to stab him again or even who deserves to win.

  • #1726 Posted 4 years ago
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Tall glass of Kel

Tall glass of Kel

Ernie... :)

  • #1735 Posted 4 years ago
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  • 4 out of 5
Mighty-Joe Young LOA

Mighty-Joe Young LOA

Storykeeper I meant that he didn't like the fact that she stabbed him, but he probably had it coming.

  • #1737 Posted 4 years ago
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slapdashmonuments

slapdashmonuments

I just like puns. Especially when it works well. I may well be confused, though. executive dysfunction big today, but I like your writing and I think we all appreciate your comments! Also the ref to that big ape movie and the smaller ape movie.

  • #1756 Posted 4 years ago
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