A Smudge on the Mind


Inspiration hits with a flash, stories written on the go. A rumble of laughter and the tale is heard only in echoes. The wind blows me in a new direction. Whom shall I visit next?

I could see better before; I recall that night clearly.


I was clean, intact, as night fell. I think you were, too.

It was easier to make things out then, the contrast was stark

And I did not notice the nurse turn sick and pale at my innocence


A stone fell from above as we sat in companionship, smiling, talking softly

Between us it fell, and the stone floor cracked like a floe in spring's first thaw

The splinters, the damage, the dangership


From between every fissure and spit the gray came mulling out

The pristine blank of my perceptions were flecked with it

Then the drops landed o'er my eyes

When you tried to help

When you tried to clear

When you tried you smudged it

And now I'm a smear


And your visage came sharper, the faults and freckles fell into focus

As a child falls down the well while trying to catch a ball

Long way, long way down

I fell


And so now the page is unblank

Speckled and dappled and pied the clutter accumulate in my head

A soft squelch of damp leaves in the wood


I don't see you


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Comments (2 so far!)

ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

Way to use the nurse as foreshadowing! I don't know why the nurse is there, but it was a great use of her/him. I love how you create words.. dangership. The imagery of the gray muck that smudges the innocence is perfect. You can never get innocence back.

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The nurse is recruited from the Nurse's Song from the Songs of Experience by William Blake (http://www.bartleby.com/235/64.html)

...she's the same one from the Songs of Innocence too. (http://www.bartleby.com/235/52.html)

Thank you! You give such lovely comments! :D Virtual hugs offered!

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