A Better Time (After Evans & Brown's Amalden Valley)
Hand in hand,
my sister and I ringed
our governess beneath
an acorn tree's leaves.
We skipped and swayed,
and laughed whilst she did sing,
her head strangely tilting,
face half-masked in shadow,
one ear cocked to heaven
(the other to hell).
Her song warped the very air,
giving our governess a dark halo.
Witch or Devil--
whose shadow hand
clawed upward across the rough trunk
of the acorn tree?
All of us trapped
in a dance that ended
only as night fell.
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Comments (5 so far!)
Average reader rating 5.00/5
Oh, beautifully dark. I love the imagery here, starting gentle and pretty and twisting darkly.
- #674 Posted 5 years ago
- 5 out of 5
I love how it is happy and gay in the beginning but very dark shortly after
- #675 Posted 5 years ago
- 5 out of 5
Begs for a melody. It reminds of ring around the rosie, understandably, and this takes place alongside other unsettling children's songs.
- #680 Posted 5 years ago
Bizarre and dark, or is it? I really like the duality to the scene.
- #681 Posted 5 years ago
Sorry I should have explained that this was ekphrastic poetry (a vivid description of a scene or, more commonly, a work of art) which can be seen here: https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/236x/42/3e/ec/423eec571bea73201687de369f00b6f7.jpg Too bad the picture is so small. It was a wall mural when I saw it.
- #1436 Posted 4 years ago
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