Planning A Vegetable Cart Getaway
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“Have you heard the army is coming?” The mouseman began to panic. He grabbed the woven grass hat on his head and squatted down, ready to sprint back to his cart and his family.
“No, have you?”
“I did spy a patrolmouse. He was headed for the perimeter. Had his arrows and his sword. Had another mouse with him. Were telling the mousewomen to get inside with the babes.”
“That’s why we need to go. Please. Can we use your cart?”
“I..I don’t know..”
“We’ll hide in the back under the leafy greens. You can drive us out as far as you can, then we’ll get out and walk.”
“And remember, one of us is very important. This could fulfill prophecy!”
“I’d be part of prophecy?” The farmer took off is hat and looked at Flora with wonder.
“You can’t work against fate. Bad things would happen.” The farmer turned his hat in his hands as his words floated into the air. Listening to himself seemed to solidify his resolve.
“Let us get packed and then hide us among your vegetables and we’ll be on our way.”
No prequels yet. Why not write one?
Comments (6 so far!)
Average reader rating 5.00/5
Great work! Do you think anyone would try to stop them?
- #630 Posted 8 years ago
- 5 out of 5
This is an excerpt from a longer piece, and in that, they DO get stopped. :) Thanks for the sequel, creamer. I love how posting little bits here can inspire others to take this into a new direction. While I will keep working on my original story, I love to read others' thoughts on what could happen instead.
- #632 Posted 8 years ago
One wonders if the farmer is simply being played. Prophecies are such slippery vehicles.
- #635 Posted 8 years ago
Indeed.. I wonder if all the characters are being played. What is fate anyway?
- #647 Posted 8 years ago
Very cute, and I like that it just dives into the world without the need for a lot of exposition about these mouse people and their conflict. That adds to the urgency of it all.
- #687 Posted 8 years ago
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I loved the image of a nervous mouse farmer with his woven straw hat.