Now I Truly See

Jae

Just Another Escapist


When all other allies

Abandon my cause

I practice my howling

And sharpen my claws

With tears hidden closely

Behind shadowed doors

I plan perfect revenge

And haunt distant shores

What lying companions

That called themselves friends

All face hidden from me

To gain their own ends

You've killed what was loyal

Your fight has gone wrong

To tempt me with hatred

While singing your song

At last what is truthful

Now echoes aloud

Your friendship amiss

As solid as cloud


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Comments (7 so far!)

Average reader rating 4.50/5

HSAR

HSAR

The meter on those first lines were wonderful.

  • #610 Posted 7 years ago
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HSAR

HSAR

Ack - I meant "was wonderful".

  • #611 Posted 7 years ago
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aslargeasalone

aslargeasalone

I'm enchanted!

  • #612 Posted 7 years ago
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  • 4 out of 5
ethelthefrog

ethelthefrog

Engaging and melancholy. Nicely done.

  • #613 Posted 7 years ago
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THX0477

THX0477

Intriguing. Really makes me wonder about the situation behind the feelings.

  • #616 Posted 7 years ago
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MonkeySeeMonkeyDo

MonkeySeeMonkeyDo

Poetry is hard, I applaud you for how successful this is.

  • #728 Posted 7 years ago
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A Gypsy Heart

A Gypsy Heart

The mood here is interesting. It could be contemptuous yet also matter of fact. Still, it has a sad finality to it. The rhyme and flow are lovely

  • #763 Posted 7 years ago
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  • 5 out of 5
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