Tongue Tied and Fluttering
I've always had tar lungs. They're sticky-sluggish and my tongue too hesitates like yellow traffic lights curb phonation.
Maybe that's why I was silent when skewered with that cool metal. I mean, Jesus, it felt terrible to be (realistically) "edibilized" like a piece of steak on that knife. It fucking hurt.
But no matter what I tried to think, I could not shut off a part of me that quivered in pleasure at my possible demise. I didn't want to die. Life was worn out like a plain white sweater, but I was decent at it. I felt I was a cricket or a moth (nearly the bottom of the food chain), flitting metaphors for only the littlest of humans to spark at, so they would feel more than a linear coasting. What did I matter? My blood probably meant more than any creation I could have spun in our medium-killing culture. I was prey, mildly, dreamily.
Some merciful queen of insects spared me though, and paramedics arrived before my guts looked too much like curry. I'd continue chirping. I was glad, mildly, dreamily.
No prequels yet. Why not write one?
No sequels yet. Why not write one?
Comments (7 so far!)
Average reader rating 5.00/5
Also, what on earth did I just read?
- #567 Posted 6 years ago
Maybe it's time to stop chirping and sing? Second chances and all...
- #568 Posted 6 years ago
Thank you for the feature, Ethel!
And thanks for the ratings and feedback.
ElshaHawk- Maybe it is!
- #569 Posted 6 years ago
Being featured is all about how the server perceives activity on a story. You get points for views, for comments and for sequels, etc. Every night (UK time), the server decides how active every story has been: the most active gets the feature. My opinion is not consulted.
That said, this piece richly deserves to be featured, so I'm very glad that my server agrees. Well done.
- #571 Posted 6 years ago
- 5 out of 5
Ahh ok. Then thank you for explaining and for the kind words!
- #572 Posted 6 years ago
This is begging for a sequel, but I need to process it more before I can get it written! I love the imagery. Well done.
- #591 Posted 6 years ago
- 5 out of 5
Thank you, aslargeasalone! Looking forward to seeing what you do with it.
- #594 Posted 6 years ago
- Published 6 years ago and featured 6 years ago.
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